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Paradise
I walked lonely and lonely on a silent street
Saw empty benches where dear ones meet
Underneath were impressions of invisible feet

Tenderly touched by the cool breeze
Heartily greeted by nodding trees
Oh! I was like a guest to a land of love and peace

The daffodils in yellow
Looked up and said hello!
I was standing in a meadow
Basking in The heavenly glow
Eternal bliss as far as the mind could go
Like an enchanted audience in a cardist's show.

The leaves so mesmerizing like the spades of cards
My joy now equivalent to the thirteen hearts
Clear water falling like diamonds
I felt like the queen of my club ready to commence

I was in my world, my world of pleasure
Wanting to keep this safe, safe as a treasure
My mind was fresh and pleased
Wanting this tranquility never to cease
But, the silence didn't last for long
As it was broken by another dawn

This happiness and serenity in my world of fantasy
A paradox it is, in the world of reality.
The thumbnail is of the very talented chibionpu. this is her painting.

This is one of my most favourite poems...I experienced this...this feeling when i was writing it...truly, it felt like Paradise.

I hope my readers enter into the world of ecstasy too....

Peace \m/
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KyceSilverFalcon Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
When I read this, not only do I sense the emotion of joy conveyed so wonderfully, but I also get a feeling of nostalgia, as well. Because if you've ever felt this, you never forget the sensation.:aww:
And I prefer to use a rhyming scheme in my poetry as well. Very nice indeed.
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awwww i'm glad you feel that way! rhyming words give that extra positive and happy vibe to the poem! even if teh subject is dark it gives it that pump! xDDD
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KyceSilverFalcon Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It really does. And it makes it easier to come up with the poem verse by verse.:aww:
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BleedTheDream180 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol i'm gonna fav this because you rhymed hello and yellow, and i've never seen someone do that, that's awesome xD
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconmonkeygrinplz: Really??? gee thanks!
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
last 2 lines are so true - but not for long (Revelation 21:3,4)
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hehe....yeah i guess... i should have a look at the revelation now though xD
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The-Raven-Soul Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful... I have no words to describe how amazing this is!
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Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much! :iconmonkeyloveplz:
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The-Raven-Soul Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome even more! :iconiloveitmoreplz:
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